My
fellow Americans, it is time to retire worn-out phrases
Andy Rooney, Sixty Minutes
The next time the president
of the United States --- not Bill Clinton, necessarily, any president,
Democrat or Republican --- is going to make a speech, I'd like to volunteer
some help. Please, Mr. President, let me see the speech in advance so I
can weed out the worn-out and tired phrases in it and save both you and
the American people time we so desperately need for a good night's sleep.
President Clinton's State
of the Union speech reminded me of this, of course, but it's been true
of every formal speech I ever heard a president give; the speech was too
long and it was filled with clichés that could have been eliminated.
Mr. Clinton said a lot of
god things in his speech, but it could have been cut from 64 minutes to
45 minutes without losing anything but fat and fatousness.
We know a president's speech
is written in advance, but it shouldn't sound like writing, it should sound
like talking. President Clinton talks better than he speaks. If a speech
writer is any good, he or she can make it sound like talk. Peggy Noonam
made it sound that way for President Reagan and President Bush
a couple of times.
Here are just a few phrases
from notes I make the other night that could have been removed without
loss to the real content of the speech. Most of the phrases have appeared
in every State of the Union speech given by every president in the last
50 years
"We gather tonight in a world
of hates..."
"We must do more..."
"It's time to stop..."
"We must set tough, world-class
academic standards for all our children. (the phrase "world class" is a
cliché that has been very prevalent for about 20 years now and ought
to be retire. The writer probably thought it make the presenter sound "with
it," but it make him sound out of it.)
"Its time to stop ignoring..."
"I know it will be difficult..."
"Tell it to Richard and
Judy Anderson." The names change, but this line always follows some where
shortly after the speech-making president tells a heartwarming (or heartbreaking)
personal story that someone has dug up for him to make his speech sound
more personal.
"To those who would..."
"It will not be easy..."
"I know that facing up to
these interest will take courage..."
"As we take these steps
together to renew our strength at home, we cannot turn away from our obligation
to renew our leadership abroad."
"Of course, there are still
angels in the world."
"But there is a long, hard
road ahead."
"I say to you..."
"We'll all have to put our
heads together..."
"....and let's be honest..."
"My fellow Americans...."
"Therefore, I urge, you
..."
"So I ask you to remember..."
"And so I say to you tonight..."
(please don't tell me, you are going to tell us--- just tell us!)
"Let us weave these duty
threads..."
"Let us not reserve..."
"Let us not be naysayers."
When it comes to speeches
that are dragged out and made too long with the inclusion of meaningless
clichés, I'm a naysayer. |