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WINTRY NOOSE

Tongues pole-frozen with dreams of
living without snowballs or snowflakes.
He feels pain in the tongue and snow 
down the neck.  He thinks this high,
cold sky sunshine fillet seems a dark
shy away from summer fun, but he forgets
the sweaty sleepless nights at times associated
with the season.  Lost inside, he’s found
salvation.

Thinking winter hits like iron bar service
to his face, his counter-clockwise brain
reaction remains off course.  For him, 
time seems tethered and twenty-five below
weathered.  Electric icicles together above
heads cough-jerking with forward force
below the gallows of winter, whiplash 
source.  Lost inside, he thinks with 
closed eyes.

Meanwhile, outside, what SOUNDS like
systematic claps, is an auburn-capped
apprentice blacksmith from Lacking
Snow State on a weekend getaway
misreading maps and smiling awake.  He
traipses on with adventurous thoughts in
the winding, winter forest with twig-stepping
snaps.  Lost outside, he’s found       
salvation.

Cascading through banks of blustering
snow, the blacksmith recalls his homeland,
and wishes he could relocate and live in
a land such as this with fresh, crisp air
and sauntering visions.  Ice-caked branches
glisten and crack as the blacksmith walks
on.  He feels free and alive and takes bold
chances.  Lost outside, he dares not close
his eyes.


NOW THIS IS THE ORIGINAL VERSION.  AS YOU CAN SEE, THERE WERE...SOME CHANGES.  

Tongues pole frozen, systematic claps
through and through tourist traps with an auburn-capped
apprentice blacksmith misreading maps
in the winding winter forest snaps

No go-gliding paper plane, "return, return!"
high, cold sky fillet, shy away from gone crash & burn
air gambit pawn turns
ash gray player yells "I will learn!"

Iron bar service, clockwise pain reaction, course
tethered, forty-five below weather, natural force
electric icicles together, remorse
above and below the gallows, whiplash source

As though it goes, en route the law 
off track and rhyme, but with a reason
punishment cares not the season

gO

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