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You have captured my heart,
I will not stop loving you. Sooner would Fire lose her heat, Sooner would Wind lose her breath, Sooner would Earth's skin begin to crack, Sooner would the Stars lose their shine, and Sooner would Water herself turn dry, before I stop loving you. |
Copyright ©2009 Ashi Shadow -3/14/09
Stars line was after other lines, originally was at top of Stanza and considered dropping it as thought it took away from the personification of the other lines, then moved it down to 4th line in Stanza. I felt that also helped with the number of "Sooner"s somehow.First line was added, and also a "you have captured my soul," which I decided not to keep. It does look like I should probably remove another line from the Sooner stanza, and maybe move the last line back to the bottom of that Stanza, but I don't really want to decide which of the last 3 lines in the stanza to remove so am leaving it alone.
Inspired by "Dear, if you change, I'll never choose again" by John Dowland
http://poetryfoundation.org/archive/poem.html?id=180702