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I am a skipping stone skipping across the pond of your heart – will you reach out and catch me? Catch me and stop me from skipping further. I don't want to keep skipping, I have been hopping because other women have tossed me on to the lake. until I found my way to you. I was just a stone to them: just a smooth and sleek object to toss, to allow to sink to the bottom of the water, warbling. I don't want to be just a stone. I want to be a human: allowed to grow, to be nurtured, to smile, to be a person. |
Copyright ©2017 Ashi Shadow - 3/18/17 while listening to "please forgive me" by David Gray, with the woman to do the catching being Addie.
The poem hit a roadblock after the word smile.
I'm still not satisfied with the last line.
Maybe I should make it "to be treated as a person", but that does not have the connotation of togetherness.
I could make it "to be held as a person", but that has extra connotations.
What I want is closer to "to be the other half of a relationship" or partnership.
Maybe "to be in a relationship".
Maybe "to be in a marriage".
Originally was "tossed me out on", but I felt that "tossed me out" may give the reader the impression that the stone is not innocent.