|
Sometimes I see magpies, and I think of you. The brown of your eyes, the arch of your eyebrows, the smile on your face, all inches below mine. The soft swell of your breast beneath your shirt; beneath my hand. Am I destined, to remember the best of women, only after they are gone? |
Copyright ©2011 Ashi Shadow -- April 7th, 2011.
On Stasia.
Considered the word "familiar" before breast.
I struggled with the possibility of putting the word "always" at the beginning of the last line or the end of the 2nd last line.
I did not want to put it anywhere, because I felt that "always" was implied.
In the end, I decided that putting a comma after the word destined was a sufficient substitute.
It's hard to say why I feel that works, perhaps the forced pause implies the passage of time, at least when I read it.