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You are very good for me. you teach me gentility, which I had forgotten you teach me how to find smiles, when I thought there were none left you show me that there are reasons to live in a world with green leaves that there's hope in the hearts of others, and paths we can walk on together to contentment. The world can be a happier place if we can just hold hands, and smile. |
Copyright ©2012 Ashi Shadow - 04/17/12 on Renku Mirikawa
"paths which we can walk on together", but I didn't like the way which sounded in there for the meter.
Considered a comma before "contentment" and a line break after "place".
Renku, you are a sea of calm in a world of storms.