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Digital Angel: "This story is excellent!
Very well written and extremely good!
Write more please!"
Hanzei: "awesome, very cool and even sorta romantic keep up the good work."
Paperclippe: "I liked it. It was pretty good, but kind vague..."
Austen: "This is a great story! "
Val: "Well, nice fic... but I've to tell ya.... lots of OOC, mostly with Goku... but it was sweet...."
Prince of all Saiyans: "Interesting approach to his childhood. It's nice that someone else is writing about something more original like this. It's good to have nice new stories that twist and turn. Keep writing."
Tokumei Kibon: "wooooww... I consider this a MUST read for Yamcha fans.. I don't think I've ever seen such a great story of how Yamcha became a desert bandit. I adored this fic with all my heart!"
Emu: "Emu: *Eyes bug out* GAAAA! What happens? WHAT? That was...climatic. Nice writing style. You build up good suspense, yes? Tha is good and bad. As now i am hooked and it is uncomfortable. *Has hook in mouth* Owie. Now i feel bad for fishies. Eeeeee"
Birdee: "Wow, Paladone... that was deep. Might want to look over it again... or spell check... "Howc an that brat do it and not I." Howc? What's howc? lol ;) jk Pala, ^^ Really powerful... (I was going to kill Krillin for calling Veggie-chan a hot head... he stood up for his son! Isn't that a HUGE step?!) BUt yes, it was good ^^"
Lee: "Awesome job, Paladone! You did very well, considering it was so hard to write. Even as a strong Son Gohan lover, I LOVED this story. It really brought out how Vegeta felt. Great job and keep it up."
Sisyphus: "It is difficult to describe Vegeta dealing with his emotions and keep him in character, but you did a really good job of that so I tip my hat to you; I could honestly hear Vegeta thinking this. Keep up the good work!"
Baby Buruma: "The noise! HAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH THAT WAS MESSED UP HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA AND I LOVED IT HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH"
Can't Buy Me With Strawberries
Ketsuban: "This is a REALLY cute story. If you brush up on your English a bit, I'd LOVE to see a sequel!"
Tokumei Ribon: "I love this story SO much.. it's not even funny.. I just can't get ENOUGH OF IT!! *hugs the life out of the fic and Val* You rule! Don't let those flamers bug ya, I love Y/B and this is the best!!!!"
Daughter of Ashes: "Well I definetly believe you when you say you worked really hard on this, and it was time well spent. This has really great writing, very poetic throughout. I also like that everyone was in character."
Eve Elle: That's very good. Very touching and a very realisitc portrayal of ChiChi."
Dad, I have Something to Tell You
Sara: "I loved your story "Dad I Have Something To Tell You." You have no idea how true that is. I am just 15 myself and there are toooonnns of girls that age around my school that are either pregnant or have had the kid and their parents forced them to give it up. That why I loved this story so much cuz it could really relate to something one of my freinds is going through. "
kikyous twin sister: "really great story i dont know what to say it has to be one of the best storys"
Do Guardian Angels Exist, Dad?
Bouzi Neo: "this was a lovely work of art and I'm very happy i stumbled upon it in a search, it's one of a kind, and it's now one of my favorites.
its really sweet and i am about to cry, thats how deep i am affected by it."
Yakira Vegeta: "it was so DEAD MARVELOUS! i'm a writer, too, though, but i hardly write sad stories between Vegeta's relationship with his family. gosh, ur so good! my cheeks were full of tears while reading it. i should've brought tissues with me, heehee. come 2 think of it, many daughters like Bra, hardly ever show closeness towards their fathers if u know what i mean. anyway, I LOVE IT! keep on writing! it has a very good lesson 2 everyone, esp. those who barely experience ATTENTION from their fathers. "
Kiwikiipaa: I am in tears... that was beautiful. Truthfully, I am weeping right now, not hyserically crying, but just lightly weeping. Exceptional (be proud, I dont use that word a lot ~_^). Oh... I cant tell you how much I loved that, it was just perfect, everything about it was perfect. You are an outstanding writer.
The LadyBlue: I loved it it was truly beautiful and inspirational it made me almost cry it was sweet with a twist of bitterness but sweet in that sappy sad ‘I love you’ kind of way. Very good
M'Lila: unbelievable... your perspective on the afterlife... moreso, inbetween, carries such a haunting beauty. But so sad! I truly understand the heartache of the Mirai timeline...heros aren't always rewarded with happy endings. I never liked, nor ever will I, endings, or goodbyes. I've always adored beginnings. In truth, what happened in this fic confirmed my worst fears, and sorrow. How sad! It was very well written... I loved it. Keep up the great job.
Chrystal: "Wow,I loved this fic!
You've done a great job!!!
Keep up the great work**
Sayonara,
**Chrystal**"
Emu: "Emu: gAaaaaa that was so sad! But good mind you. Very nice writing style and job of portraying emotions but one thing. WILL YOU MAKE A SEQUEL?!?! Please? PREETY PLEASE?!?"
alex: "3 things to discribe your story: sweet, sappy, cute...^_^"
Princess Sunset: "Very creative idea! It was cute!"
Tupper: "Heh. I liked the names you used, and the writing was nice."
Rizu-Nebraska: "That's the way a romance should BEEEEEE~!!! What a sensuous story! o.O Your descriptions were positively lovely, and you didn't run them into the ground. Excellent work. =)"
White Rain: "thats really good, i'm really touched. few authers can descrbe Chichi's Goku's love that well "
Libby: "Wow, I'm impressed.
I have a bit of spare time on my hands and I am rating some of the stories I come by.
Yours is the best one I've seen up to now, you've really brought out the sweetness of Goku's relationship.
\\//^.~
Well done "
Bitter girlfan: "I really can appreciate your tone, but you have no idea what you're talking about. The "characters" that you've created are completely off base. Do you even watch the show? If you did, then you'd know that you've just trivialized Goku and Chichi's relationship into something from the Jerry-f*cking-Springer Show. Loser."
LuciferDaimaou: "AH! EVIL DIALOGUE MARKS! Seriously, the style of quotes was annoying, but that aside, it was a clever plot ;-)"
Molly: "*sniff* This is such a great fic! It was such a tear jerker! It was so great and romantic and I just couldn't stop crying!"
Xenia: "It's really good. I loved the way it expressed Goku's feelings, but it was sooooooo sad. I started to cry."
alias4ever: "OMG...what a tear jerker! well written and it was in good character. not necessarily 'the' characters, but the fact that is was from a teenager stand point. good fic....very good!"
Nel: "That was pretty good. Everyone was way OOC and stuff (Vegeta a confindent?) but otherwise I liked it."
Severina: "::SOB:: that was f*cking painful. I loved how you described how bulma was feeling, the curling up in bed trying to imagine his arms around her, the total obviliousness to the cold, the doubt of herself or her love for him. Almost any woman in the world can relate to that, and that's what makes a good story =)"
NariRyo: "That was really well written. I liked the way you potrayed the chatacter. Good job."
Darqstar: "Wow, that was so sad. It was well written, but I'm getting all misty-eyed now. Good story."
Vengence of Golden Stars: "Awwwww! That's so unbelievably, incredibally, completely and totally sweet! I love this fic! It has that relevance to life, the still relates to the characters personalities. It's wonderful!"
Sailor Star: "*dabs eyes* How sweet! He's not stupid or silly at all! Very serious and reflective...I like it I like it!"
Dreamweaver: "Mulligan? Hmm...too normal a name for DBZ, 'ay? Oh well...despite my nit-picky gripe, this was a very nice story. I'm going to ask something kinda strange...please, oh please don't make a sequal. This story is nearly perfect and should stay the way it is."
Mira: "First of all, your descriptions were beautiful. Your vocabulary is impressive, and very much added to the over-all story. Also, descriptions were there when needed, but not too lengthy (as mine sometimes tend to be if I don't go over the story like 6 times! =P ). Indeed, they were very effective in not only describing the scene, but setting the mood as well.
The characters were kept well in character as well. At first I thought that Eighteen was too easy-going at times, but when you think about it, she's only so uptight because that's the way most people treat her. With sweet little Kril she'd undoubtably be a lot more.... can't-think-of-another-word....easy-going. Anyway, that just took a lot of space verifying what you already proved....stupid Mira.
Anyway, congratulations. This is definitely the best K/18 fic I've read, and one of the best fics altogether. The ending scene was excellent as well. It was intense without having tons of action....the emotions being played out were drama enough. Very well done. My hat is off to you. Well, at least it would be, if I were wearing one....eesh. (Never try to write an intelligent review during exam week! *shakes head* I think my brain is shutting down.) Anyway, keep it up, you have an awesome gift."
Val: LB!!!!! *cries* This is Sooooooooooooooo Sad (with capital S)!!! Poor poor Paris...... Woa, it's been a long time since I read a fic with her!! Wait... I never read any!! Cool LB!! you rule as an author, as a person, as a friend, etc. etc. Though, the end is a little too rude... (is trying to give some contructive review, don't pay much attention) Anyway, it was soooooooooo sad (wait, I said that already, didn't I?) and sooooooooooo well done (I didn't say that yet!!)!! Bravo!!
Loveable Beauty: "I loved the way you were able to portray Goten so expressively. Also, is that a song in there? Anyways, I think this is a great story...keep writing!!"
Like Father, Like Daughter -- Saiyajin Style
Mira: "Well, you already know I like this fic, as I do all of yours, but hey, I'm going to tell you again. This is another one of yours that proves to be funny simply because you didn't try overly hard to make it so. Good work"
Val: "LOL! Saiyaman!! That was great. The whole fic was great. Excellent. Funny and cute, real sweet and quite realistic."
Frostmaiden: "I can't even breath...I literally cannot breath. It is so beautiful, so well portrayed, that I don't have a damn idea of what to say...I have never cried so hard over a book, much less a fanfic. You have an indescribable talent that I, nor many others, could match. I love the poems that you wrote with it too."
Voice: "There is something about this story that is so profound I cannot describe it. It made me laugh, it made me cry and it left me with a feeling of hope. The ending was a real surprise! I really liked the Piccolo/ChiChi pairing: Bold and surprising, but well-done! The incident with the thong and in the barrel were hilarious, and I really liked the 'lime' with the hand coming through the steam....it made my imagination run(that's a good thing, right?), and it was so much better than showing the actual act. The illness and stages of grief were profoundly realistic. The emotions flying constantly and the tension kept me hanging on throughout the entire story, which was a story that anybody could identify with in some form or another. And the song lyrics! They were very well-placed to fit the mood of the scenes! Oh, man...I'll never forget this story. -------- This is the best fic I have ever read. Ever."
Loriko Neko: Just now finished this last chapter. Wow... It's been so great reading this story. It's made me laugh and has brought tears to my eyes more than once.
Twilight Rose: Oh my god. That was one of the most- the most- I can't even explain how that story made me feel... just know it's all good ^_~ I absolutly loved it. That romance, It wasn't mushy oh I love you soooo much.. It was real. Believable and forever like.
ysa-chan: Oh my... that was awesome! This is the best goku/bulma fic I’ve ever read. The story line was truly unique and you wrote the characters personalities down rightly. It was written beautifully, the way you described their feelings was just brilliant.
me: "well, that was sad, i'm crying practically, if you were goin for a t/m fic, well that best summed up the best love story i heard. who knew love was painful. oh ineed to stop crying. its so sad, but sweet all combined in one for the love of everyone and all the pain, woooh ok i'm getting too dramatic, but that was good, even though it was sad, but it was still good, keep up the good work.
Anikka Sedai: "WAAHHHHH! That was so sad, I've got tears man. My poor, poor Goten-chan. Normally I'm not a very big fan of Paresu but I like the way you wrote her."
CSHayden: "Very, very nice!! It's very rare to see a writer who can crawl into a character's head like this. Write more!"
Piccoluna: "Now this is interesting ... I can't say I was enthralled at first about a lesson being taught at poor Piccolo's expense, but I liked the way you handled this, and it was a big surprise to see this one turn out serious ... it's certainly a lot better than reading fics that purportly humiliate the poor guy. What a clever twist. Way to go ... I actually liked this quite a bit."
Dragon MacLeod: "Dark, shocking, and absolutely horrifying, but it was very powerful. "
Hell's Hauntress: "Ok, the review is in, and it can be described only with one word.
WOW.
I mean, holy.......not to sound hopelessly stupid or something, but I'm GLAD you're in a bad mood lately. I mean, I doubt we can see the portrayal of Juunana-gou so well if you WEREN'T in such a crazy, angry, angsty mood. Juunana was portrayed PERFECTLY -- his sense of loss and detachment, his loneliness, and his severed ties but unable to abandon. And I'm also quite glad you added Juuroku-gou in the snippet of a flashback --- he's by far one of the LEAST noticed characters in the history of DBZ, and yet I think he has a character easily as deep and complex as Juunana-gou and Juuhachi-gou, if not more (I mean, think about it --- how easy could a killing machine learn about the ways of loving life while hunting down a Saiya-jin to the ends of the earth?? The way he loves everything around him, even Goku -- he kills him only for the programming, not out of personal hate, and would probably put away his hatred to ally together for a greater good, like the occurance of Cell -- is the formula for a deep, complex character that has never been delved. Aside from the Mr. Satan fic I challenged you to, if you feel up to it, think you can write a Juuroku-gou fic? ^_^ ).
But I'm rambling. Anyhow, I loved everything about this...except the ending. No, don't get me wrong -- it was brilliantly crafted like usual, I'm just a tad hurt that Juuhachi-gou can accuse Juunana-gou of not being the brother she knew when it WAS quite obvious that SHE wasn't the sister he knew as well. Juunana-gou can be stubborn and he doesn't have a 'special someone' to help him see the DBZ senshi's side of things, and I was hoping she could understand that. She SHOULD know that Juunana wouldn't REALLY go through with what he said about forgetting her -- he might ignore her for the rest of his life, but he'd be brooding about her for sure. I can say definitely that she tried, but I was hoping she'd have more patience with her twin. Juunana-gou, n matter WHAT he says, will never forget her and the good ol' days that they once shared. But Juuhachi-gou just SAYING so bluntly that she doesn't need him anymore kinda struck a deep chord within me, no matter how true the matter is. Are you SURE that she won't reconsider? =O
But hey, you can't have everything... ^_^ And I must say, the way you made Juuhachi-gou severe their bond forever REALLY makes a good ending. Love the last couple of paragraphs; so bittersweet for Juuhachi, but so starkly painful for Juunana. To think, finally returning from hell after five years, only to live as an immortal shell among humans with his only family abandoning him, and the only other of his kind (Juuroku-gou) dead...."
Velasa: "*grinz again* that was awesome. loved the feelings, loved the style, LOVED how Pic was a good part of it *glomps him*, and that you avoided the pit that is Yammy-bashing.... *glomps him too, but lighter* caught me off-guard with juuhachi.... "
SMDSP: "I loved this fic! Everything was so right about it, none of the characters were the least bit out of character. I have to say that this was above supberb, this was ultimate. I would scream "SEQUEL," but I don't feel like you need one, the ending was just that...I can't explain, but I loved this fic. Thanks for writing."
Kaijidragon: "I loved this story, it is amazing how you got to the root of all the resentments all the earth warriors felt. I am speechless at this display of talent. I hope you keep writing more fictions like this because it was mindblowing. I could see the characters in my mind exactly how you portayed them. All were true to character. Please keep writing! *walks over and hands a expensive pen and scroll for Outcast to write on and looks up and clicks favorite*"
Christina Crosby: "My god I LOVE YOUR EVIL DOLL OF FUNI STORIES.
I can't help falling over with laughter. I laugh until my ribs hurt.
Keep um up"
Chibi Chichan: "*Chibi_Chichan blinks at fic*
BBBBBBBBBBOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRIIIIINNNNNGGGGGGGG!!!!
How come its ssssssssssooooooooo short?Well anyways good try at the fic!I wish you luck in the future!!!!
Ja'ne!
P.S:Loves G(K)/CC 4 eva!"
Q: "Okay. I just thought Goku would be a little more naive. lol;) Cute tho."
adimra: "I LOVE that commercial, and I LOVE what you've done with it"
Trunks lil' sis: "Wow! That was a mouth full, and that ending? I never expected that! You rock"
ShannonL: "~wild whoops and cheering are heard in the background.~ Alright, I, sooo love this. I agree with you when you say we need to break those Canadian myths. So I'm giving you two Canadian thumbs up.~ Applause continues~"
Soulfire: "That was great! I was getting annoyed that all the Bulma/Vegeta stories I was reading were either poorly written or had a lot of sex in them. How refreshing to find something new! Thanks for sharing this story, I really enjoyed it! :)"
Tenshi Kami Chrissy: "Wow, that was really good!!! Not rushed, explained carefully...great job!!"
Setsunna: "hhhmmmmm....interesting...that was a pretty good one...."
Felidae: "A very good get-together. I like it a lot"
DigiExpert: "sad and beautiful. I was almost crying after reading it. It was so good."
Val: "LOL!! I HAD to read it again!! So hilarious!! Tis brillant! Write more like this! Good humor fics with not TOO much OOC (I mean, if you push a little, all of this COULD happen!!) Bravo!"
AnnaK: "Although it was a little confusing in terms of grammer, it was really good and kept everyone nicely in character. :) I can really see that happening, and it was rather bittersweet. Leaves you to wonder what Veggie's gonna go off and do now... Anyway, well done!"
Rebecca: "Wonderfully emotional. Heart wrenching. Incredible story."
Daughter of Ashes: "Very good, and it was true to the charachters too. I could see this being ripped right from the series."
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