June 26, 2006

Well this is my first review of the 'Ultimate Submissionist' Jason Wright. I was worried that I was only getting one rp from him forcing me to give him a default Rookie Ranking. Last minute he posts his second, better late than never I always say.
Currently from what I'm reading from his promos Wright and the love of his life Sara are preparing for their Wedding. Wright has personnel issues with his father and wishes not to speak to him, but it's his dear Sara that want's to be given away by his father, seeing as both her parents have passed away and she hasn't a single sole to walk her down the aisle. She take's this deep to heart and cry's at the thought of it.

Jason Wright's method of writing at points is truly excellent, reaching Elite standard at times. There is trouble with allot of spacing during conversations however, that I feel lets him down at points.
His choice of words and how he uses them in his sentences as he describes himself and surroundings during the story is excellent, truly excellent.
A strong romance between himself and Sara is building and reading in detail through this, you can feel the emotions of these fictional characters, another Elite trait.

There are moments of sheer brilliance coming from Jason, I've noticed this through build up and through certain conversation. But again the faults I'm seeing is through his constant spacing through conversation sections; On saying that it has me thinking about this months re-review of Robert Kaine.
He has a similar problem but he's starting to use the 'Novel Format' to tackle this.
I feel Jason should adopt this method too. The rest of his work shouts out Elite Quality.
But this spacing problem knocks him down to Contender.

So for now I grant the "Ultimate Submissionist" Jason Wright the Rank of Contender.
If Jason sorts out the Spacing problem then Elite Beckons. I'm really impressed with Robert Kaine's partner and I hope he sorts out this problem cause he's an impressive writer. A must read to all E-Fed Fans/GWE folk alike.