Thursday, January 6, 2005 9:21 PM

This is perhaps my first review of a character outside TNT & UWA, in a fed called HRW.. Lived a maaaaAAN called Kaos Chase.
He insists that his rps are based on the 'Classic Rp Method',
I've never heard of a classic rp method before but what I do know is this style is similar to my old work.. Before changing to a more up to date way of rping.
I read all the rps he has sent me and the general motivation for his character is based on his past in the WWE.
He reflects on his World Title reign and his partnership on long time student and friend, K-Nyne.

I have read through all his rps that he posted on the E-Mail he sent me... Well tried to anyway.
Chase's rps are just way too big!
I'm speaking on an outside criticism not because UWA and HRW had a fall out. As anyone can tell you, me and UWA don't see eye to eye at the moment lol.
Back to the review... His rps dragged on and it became too tedious to read through, a sign of bad writing. Through the eyes of an outsider reading a Kaos Chase Rp, The inpatient type would feel the same way.
There is a skill to the classic rant as seen through a Jonny Fly Rp which I'm sorry to say this guy doesn't have, talking way too much to the point it dwindled on, he rarely swears though, which is a good thing as his character shows maturity.

Now the second rp I see as a bit of an improvement.
The build up to the scene is described in quite a decent fashion.
The words he uses could have been used to a much greater effect in his communication, punctuation, and odd spelling mistake so fourth.
He has the makings of being a decent rper, he just needs to lower his rp size and condense the rant.. You could do just as good of a job if you reduced the talk by about 50%.
You show inexperience.. But Promise for the future!
A MID-CARDER Status for now.

*Feel free for a second opinion after 30 days and I'll re-review your character.