Thursday, March 10, 2005 10:19 PM

Review number 4 for the Man from Pan.
Crucible 4 Winner is proof enough that this man deserves the ELITE status, as to win the Crucible you need to be of ELITE quality as it is one of the most competitive tournaments in E-Fedding as I am a Former Crucible Winner.

I gladly offer the Status of ELITE to Rilo Thornsfeld welcome to the ELITE family.

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Tuesday, October 26, 2004 9:19 PM

This is my third review of Rilo and after nearly 1 year I feel that now is the time to move Rilo to a CONTENDER Status. Rilo has greatly improved since my last review of Rilo in Febuary.

His spelling and grammer are allot better, his storylines are always entertaining and he has greatly improved in environment description.
His character is well recognised as the Man from Pan never drifting away from his personality.
He is definately a well made character... A Contender class of character and he's getting closer and closer to that ELITE status with every promo he posts.
Keep it up.

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Friday, February 27, 2004

After my last review of Rilo in November he feels that his character doesn't get the recognition he deserves.... Like I said to Rilo the other night he laid these words to me "Second opinions are what the Big Boss Top 50 are about".
Well it's been almost 4 months since my last review of Rilo so let's see how he's improved.

He has improved a hell of allot since our last review. It feels like this is a totally different Rilo all together. He has stopped writing the theme music part which is great that he's taken my advice on that.
His work rate is second to none and Big Boss should know about that, losing the European Title to him. ;o)
His spelling has improved a great deal and his grammar is getting better from his last review.
This is definitely the new and improved Rilo and he was right to ask me for a second opinion for I have slacked on keeping an eye on this guy.

At the moment the only improvements he could do with is his ability to describe the environment of a Promo and his obsession with mind games can do with an improvement because in our match I generally saw nothing that would have me believe that I was under his mind games.

But still Rilo's improved very quickly and that is well deserving of you keep up the good work.

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Friday, November 14, 2003

So far I have read all of Rilo's Rps that are on the board and I think I can make a valid report of this character.
From what I've read because I don't know Rilo very well is that he is supposed to have the Gimmick of a wizard that enjoys to play the old Mind Game trick on any opponent he steps into the ring with.
Currently after Rubeus Dahrkov. He has alligned himself with the Kovenant to start a war on UWA.

Here's the painful part, the faults of this character! Although he rps decent sized rps but they have no substance at all.
I only read... what word can I use... twoddling!!! meaning he babbles on and on. Like I said an honest review... Don't be too mad at me Rilo :o) Unfortunately their's more.
His spelling is so - so, but he tends to cut off alot of sentences with paragraphs which can be confusing to read.
Copying and pasting lyrics from "Bodies" by Drowning Pool is kind of a half arsed job when really you should of added certain parts of the lyrics with the mood of the crowd and your character, it seems to me you've added the lyrics to make the rps look bigger, to score points with the staff. It's like copying and pasting an old rp hoping that nobody will notice or copying a certain part of a story and replacing the original names with your own, takes the creativity out of the rp if you get my meaning.

Well sorry if this seems dissing in anyway but in the top 50, that is my job to point out your mistakes to help you improve and become a legend. Hope you do read this and that your character does improve, you have an interesting gimmick you just need to develope it like I did with the Big Boss. It takes time but you'll get better as the months pass by.