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EN 211B

Here are the essay I've written thus far for my EN 211B class: Narrative and Descriptive Writing. please select the essay you wich to read from the drop down menu below. Below that, I will post the grades to my essays when I recieve them.

Grades
 
"..And Then I Ran Some More."
A-
"The Water-Course Way" A
"The Visions and the Voice"  

 


“…And Then I Ran Some More.”


        Runners, to your marks! Suddenly I forgot where I was, where I came from. I forgot who my friends to either side of me were. I forgot that my feet were cold and that I could hardly breathe. I forgot where I put my sweats or who had my jogging shoes.
        “Set!” I heard an official yell into a microphone. The cracking noise was just barely understandable over the roaring crowd and the thunder of four hundred runners’ feet prancing as they lined up to my left and right.
        “Yes, I remember now. That’s the same pebble I saw here while warming up.” I thought to myself in less than an instant. Like a light switch turning on, I remembered what I was doing there. I remembered every day at practice since I started running cross-country in seventh grade. I remembered the people immediately to my right and left were my teammates. I glanced at them and realized how focused they were, and for a split second I wondered why.
        “No time to think!” I said to myself. I must have said that to myself before every race. My mind always wandered. It kept me calm. Adrenaline was not a good thing to waste. I tried to save my rushes until I needed them in a few seconds.
        BANG! That was the gun. Move. Jeremy, you’ve got to go. This is it, your last race. It’s now or never.


        “Jeremy!” I woke up to my friend Garrett hitting my knee. He seemed excited. I was tired and therefore couldn’t possibly imagine why.
        “We’re here!”
        “What?” I asked, groggily rubbing my eyes. I never did care for what my mom called “eye boogers,” but it always felt good to rub it out of my eyes after waking up. I sat up in my bus seat. I saw everyone in front of me looking out of the bus windows on my side of the bus. I turned to my right and saw the purpose of the four-hour bus trip, Michigan International Speedway. Ah, the state meet. The end-all, be-all of high school cross-country meets. Suddenly it clicked, a feeling of anxious nervousness mixed with a double shot of awe and adrenaline. The state meet! I was suddenly so excited to get inside the stadium, to get warmed up, to race, and to be at the awards ceremony. I could hardly wait for everything to happen, yet knowing full well, it was the last time I would experience any of it, and that it was all such a long time away.
        The whole team walked around the course, just as we did before any race. We had to be familiar with the course so as to not take any wrong turns by mistake. I remember walking along by myself, with my hands in my coat pockets straining for every bit of heat. My head, shrouded by the hood on my sweatshirt made me feel as though I were in a cave. I always walked by myself. It was my way of focusing on the race to come. It was my time to devise strategy and figure out whom I wanted to beat.
        We eventually finished walking the five-kilometer course and headed to our team tent to regroup before our warm-up. Three hours had passed since we were on the bus, but it seemed to pass like 3 minutes. However, the fifteen-minute warm-up jog seemed, as it always did, like fifteen days. I could feel the anxiety and excitement building up inside of me the whole way. I tried to concentrate on my form to calm myself down. It worked, but soon my mind began to wander back to the coming race.
        Somehow through the crowd and twists and turns that had me lost almost immediately after beginning our warm-up, we arrived back at our tent. Stretch, change shoes, get to the start line, strides, shed sweats; this was the routine we had been doing every Saturday for the past 14 weeks. Except this time it was different. Everyone paid deathly attention to getting their shoes laced up just right and to getting the proper amount of strides. Everyone was focused. Everyone had that look of disgusted anger, eyes narrow and cold as the dry, crisp air surrounding us all. The only reason we weren’t frowning in our annoyed sort of focus, was that we were breathing heavily through our mouths in anticipation, in preparation. Everyone knew what must be done. Everyone knew what was at stake.
        The next few minutes seemed to pass as quick as our warm-up passed slowly. I eventually found myself staring at the ground with my left foot on a painted white line wearing little more than half a pound of polyester shorts and jersey that offered me little more warmth and comfort than can of pop would. I was, we all were listening for one thing, the ear piercing sound of a gun that would stand out in life and memory as sharp in contrast as the sun would stand out in the black emptiness of space.
        BANG! That was the gun. Move. Jeremy, you’ve got to go. This is it, your last race. It’s now or never. My feet seemed to move forward on their own, requiring little conscious thought from me. I began to tilt my head back up to level so I could see in front of me. I felt a sharp pain in my chest as I saw the sea of runners before me. Countless runners all racing towards the first turn. I moved into position to avoid getting caught up in the mass. All of a sudden I realized I was alone in a huge crowd. I didn’t see any of my teammates; there were no familiar jerseys in sight. I didn’t even recognize any members from rival teams. Then I realized that they were ALL members of rival teams. They were all gunning for us, gunning to replace the returning state champions. It made the painful realization of my impending failure that much more realistic.
        I was no further than eight hundred meters into the race and I was already out of breath. I was gasping for air like a fish out of the water. I kept thinking how cool, yet how cheesy it would be if I actually did do well in this race. I was told by my parents and doctors not to run. Having pneumonia, wearing almost nothing in twenty-degree weather while running was not the sort of combination that could be called healthy. My lack of breath wasn’t because I was out of shape. I was choking because there was no room in my lungs for air. I had no choice really. I was the fourth ranked man on my team. I had to give it my best shot or our team was bound to lose the state championship.
        I ran step after step, mile after mile. I passed one man after the next. I ran to keep up with every man who passed me, some successfully, others not. I ran, until my mind blanked out. My mind had stopped, but my body refused to quit. I don’t remember what happened after the halfway point where my parents were standing yelling out how many more I needed to pass to medal and what my time was. I never heard what they said anyway, there were too many other people yelling and screaming for their friends, brothers, and sons, and I was coughing too much to pay attention to the crowd. We had somewhere along the course of the race left the stadium to run in the vast fields behind it. I knew that once I re-entered the stadium, I had three quarters of a mile left, and here it came. I tried to pick up my pace a little bit. I strained for every ounce of energy I could muster from my sore, energy starved, oxygen deficient muscles. I continued to cough. Gasping for air, I searched for a split second my body would let me take at least one deep breath. I coughed again, and felt something in my mouth. I spit it out as soon as I could, knowing that the more junk I had in my mouth, the less room it made for air to get by. I remembered seeing what I had spit as it flew to the ground. It was big; about the size of a peanut, and it was red. I immediately noticed the taste of blood in my mouth. The iron taste made me sick. Right then I wanted nothing more than to stop running. But if I did, I would have let everyone down, my coaches, my teammates, my family, my friends, and myself.
        Finally reentering the stadium, I pushed myself as hard as I could. I pushed myself harder and harder, searching for that little extra there always seems to be. I pushed myself to keep up with other runners as they passed me on their way to the finish.
        “Finally! It’s almost over!” I screamed in my head. I began to promise myself the faster I ran, the sooner the pain could go away. I ran harder. I ran as fast as I could. All the feeling in my legs went away as fast as all my care for keeping my body unharmed left me. A feeling of euphoria came over me. I felt nothing, yet I knew the pain was still there somewhere. I watched the huge black and white checkered sign marking the finish line pass high over my head as I ran beneath it. I knew I could finally stop running. I collapsed. I felt someone run into me. I felt someone else step on my foot. I couldn’t get up. I crawled. Someone came to me and picked me up onto my feet. I blacked out.
        I woke up a while later, the time since the race passing almost instantaneously, yet at the same time I remembered everything that happened between then and now. I had run. I had finished. I had given everything I had. My parents were happy I had finished. The doctors were surprised I survived what I had put myself through. Yet despite all of this, I hadn’t given enough for myself. I will always look back on that race and wonder what would have happened if I pushed myself harder, hard enough to keep up with those who passed me at the end.
        I’m a freshman in college now. That race was a lifetime ago. I don’t run anymore, I don’t compete anymore and that race has no significance in my life. It’s a ghost that keeps haunting me. It was the big game I was supposed to win, right? No, this isn’t Disney. This is life.


“The Water-Course Way”


        It was New Year’s Eve and I was busy stacking my drums off to the side of the stage. I was already tired from only playing a half hour set. The D.J. was blaring some sort of hardcore punk or metal band; I wasn’t paying much attention to it except for the fact that it was giving me a big headache. I think it was sometime after I finished getting my drum set off of the stage but before I started loading it in my car when I heard; “Hey, can I get a picture?”
        I was about 7 hours from home, so I didn’t recognize the voice. I looked up to see a short girl, probably about 17 years old. She had long dark hair and sort of friendly aura about her. I agreed to have my picture taken with her. The flash blinded me in the dark upstairs room of the local skate park. Although it wasn’t exactly a fan, just a girl who collects pictures of herself with “garage band” members, it still made me feel like some huge rock star. She thanked me and started to walk away as I began grabbing piles of drums to haul off to my car. I heard the same girls voice talking somewhere seemingly distant. I was in my own world when I played shows. When I drum, I’m in the zone. When I set up my set, I’m completely oblivious to other people in the room. I’m focused on the task at hand. I’m the same way, usually, when I’m tearing down my set. Yet that night I was somewhere in between. My mind was in the skate park, but my body was dead-set on packing up my drum set.
        “Hey, can my friend get her picture taken too?” I looked up from my drums. I set them down once more to allow for another picture. This time it was a girl with short blonde hair and glasses with frames that looked like contemporary versions of her mother’s high school pair. I found out her name was Sarah.
        Sarah had some sort of strange energy with her that seemed to make her very easy to be around. I’ve always been somewhat shy and somewhat introverted and meeting new people is very hard for me to do. Sarah seemed to hover around me as I made trip after trip from the stage across the darkened room, to the stairs, and down two stories out to the freezing cold parking lot to my car. I wasn’t complaining. I always like the chance to make a new friend.
        I finished loading up my drum set into my car, happy to be finally out of the cold. I walked through the snowdrifts and empty parking spaces back to the door of the skate park. I walked up the stairs, one last time and into the dark room they called the “concert hall.” Sarah was there waiting for me. She seemed to beam with energy from some unknown source. Sarah had some sort of defiant courage. She wasn’t afraid to be herself or act how she wants to. She was everything I was not. It scared me a little to have someone who was so comfortable around me despite only knowing me for less than half an hour. She kept telling me cheesy pickup lines, then laughing at me when I looked at her confused. I wasn’t used to girls hitting on me; I had no idea what to say. Every relationship I had been in prior to this moment had been somewhat of a chance meeting, if you will. I had never needed to flirt with girls I’d just met and certainly no use for enigmatic pick-up lines.
        I spent that evening with Sarah and learned she had just broken up with her boyfriend. They had shared a very good relationship and she was trying to find a way to “be free” of him as he seemed to be free of her. It really upset her that things, her situation had ended up like this. I tried to help her as much as I could. I still didn’t know her too well; I still didn’t know circumstances of her relationship with this other guy. I tried to give her advice, council, and different perspectives of her situation. We talked for hours. Somehow during that time my hand found it’s way into hers. It made me feel entirely uncomfortable, as if I was betraying her love for this other guy, and betraying my own feelings I had for someone else. Yet, I didn’t remove my hand. It comforted her. It made her see that there are other people out there; there are better people out there. I’m not trying to sound narcissistic; by no means do I mean myself as one of those better people. I just tried to show her that people come and people go, but just because a very good relationship ends, it doesn’t mean that’s it for love. Love never ends.
        Eventually 11:30 rolled around. Sarah and I had been sitting by ourselves in a dark corner in the back of the room for the past four hours. She got up and looked down at me and looked a little regretful as she said she had to get going. I sort of expected it coming. I got up to properly say goodbye. We walked over to a nearby table where there were some bits of paper out and a pen. We exchange email address before she finally went her way. I looked down at the scribbling on the piece of paper in my hand. It seemed like the phone numbers people get on their “one night stands” in the movies, yet it felt more than that. It felt as though I had made a very close friend, and indeed I had. I folded the piece of paper and put it in my pocket. I sat through one more song by the last band that played that night before deciding to leave. I walked down the steps to the parking lot. I opened the door to my car, half hoping to hear Sarah’s voice yell out to me to join her at another party. I never heard her. I drove the short distance to my hotel.
I couldn’t stop thinking about Sarah the whole time I walked up the four flights of stairs to the floor my room was on. Could I possibly have fallen in love with her? I dismissed the idea. I hadn’t known her long enough. It was just yet another sad example of the fact I grow too attached to people. I began to think about the night and the events that I had gone through. Reminiscing of the many different things I talked to Sarah about, all the things I told her that I’ve kept hidden from everyone else. There was some strange anonymity in speaking to her I realized, as if I was talking to a random person in an Internet chat room. However, Sarah was my friend now, I had her email address and she had mine, somehow I knew we would stay in contact.
        I began thinking about the rest of my life. I thought about how every time I’ve seemed to have found love it leaves me. Similar to the comfort I found in Sarah, was now gone. Well, it wasn’t gone, per se, but Sarah was no longer there with me. I felt alone again. Not so much alone in the respect of being by myself, but alone with my thoughts and emotions. I had no one to talk to, to tell my problems to, to ask advice of, or to share feelings with. I let out a small laugh. It seemed to me that this night perfectly reflected the events of my life. I mean, finding love, then being alone. I was always alone. I didn’t mind it much, but whenever someone like Sarah presents themselves, it reminds me how alone I am at times. People remind me what exactly I seem to be missing most of the time.
        I turned on the television, trying to forget things. This was my way of dealing with shit, to simply forget it. But I couldn’t forget things, not tonight. I flipped through channel after channel seeing movies of people falling in love, seeing happy couples in the late night sitcoms. It irritated me. Why couldn’t I have that? What was I doing wrong? The answer to that question eluded me; even in my sleep, the question haunted me. I had fallen asleep to the one show that didn’t have any sort of romantic themes of love or happiness, Insomniac with Dave Attell.
        I woke up a few hours later to fuzz blaring on the television. I felt the remote beneath me. I had been sleeping on it for a while. I guess that’s why it was snowing on my television. I looked over to the other side of the bed, half expecting to see someone else. Somehow I was relieved when I saw no one there, yet the empty feeling of loneliness that had tormented me earlier was back. It brought me back to a camping trip I had gone on with my girlfriend at the time. I always had enjoyed the little things in life, and simply being able to wake up in the morning with her in my arms made me feel like the happiest man in the world. That moment was gone.
        Everything eventually leaves and fades away. I guess I should be used to it by now, seeing as I’ve had to deal with the fact since before I was even cognitive of love. However, for some reason, I still hope. I still hope and believe that one day I will find my happiness and love. I believe that some bright sunny morning, I’ll be able to wake up to the person I love more than anything else, but until then I’ll float along the proverbial stream, devoid of many things I won’t remember, until I find that person.



The Visions and the Voice

Foreword:

I'd first like to say that when I was younger, I suffered from epilepsy for about 4 years. I think that really screwed me up in the head, opened some doors and closed others. However for the most part, the closed doors, I'm glad are shut and the open doors I'm glad were opened. middle school, well, 6th and 7th grade was a rough time for me. I didn't do too well in my studies and things were happening that I believe laid a foundation for the events that you will read about. I grew distant with my parents, with most people actually, but my relationship with my parents got to the point that I didn't like them, they were always upset with me, and I didn't give a shit. That's changed now, thankfully. I've learned a lot about myself over the past year trying to stop the insanity that's been going on in my mind. I've found four things that seemed to stop the visions, Buddhism, martial arts, mountain biking, and my now ex-girlfriend, Cayla. With Buddhism, I could calm my mind, "quiet" it down through meditation and my religious beliefs. When I was doing martial arts, I had something I could focus completely on. When I would mountain bike, I was at ease, having fun. When I was with Cayla, she comforted me, made me feel safe. The point is, it was a dark several years in my life, but I've found a way to overcome it. In time, I will grow out of it as I have grown out of my seizures.

 

The Visions and the Voice


        Imagine for a second being face to face with your best friend. Now picture the look in his or her face when you, completely out of the blue, stab them in the stomach. Their mouth drops open as they lean toward you. You stare at their face while you grit your teeth. You feel their hands as they slowly run over yours. They slowly turn their head to look up into your eyes as if to say, “Why?” Things already seemed to be going by slowly and this only makes it worse. The warmth of their blood flows out over your hands as you pull the knife out. Your friend drops to their feet, but before they have time to collapse completely to the ground, you step back and then with all of your strength, you kick your friend in the teeth. You have a somewhat satisfied feeling and a rush when you feel them give and you see your friend’s head snap back from the impact. There are no people around. Everything is empty. Then it all fades.
This has happened to me. This has happened to me more times than I can count. I have done this to nearly everyone I know. I tell myself that it is all in my head, but it is so real. I can almost feel their head as I kick it. I can feel the vibrations of the chainsaw as I slowly start to dismember my friend.
        I’ve never been able to explain why I get these visions. They hit fast and hard, and at any time of the day. I could be completely happy, and they come. I could be pissed off and still they come and cripple my mind as well as my body. I can’t tell what’s real anymore. Sometimes I wonder why I’m still in college and why no one is mad at me, and then I realize that it was all a dream.

        It was a Monday. I was listening to a mix recording of my favorite music. The Cranberries came on. That song always seems to invoke some sort of emotion in me, usually anger, spite, or hatred. It’s not directed towards anyone. The song just makes my blood boil.
        I was walking on my way to class. The busyness of the streets seemed to have eluded my consciousness until now.
        “ Who’s that?”
        “What?”
        “Over there. Behind the car.” He’s plotting something.” I look around. I see the man behind the car. We make eye contact. The man was gruff looking and it scared the shit out of me. I quickened my pace, keeping my head down and avoiding eye contact with the man. I walked past him as he loaded some big garbage bags into the back of his blue pickup truck. I watch the pavement, straining my eyes for any shadows that seem to be approaching me. I walked with the sun to my back as much as I could, then I could see the shadows of anyone coming at me from behind.
        There was nothing. The sun shined brightly that day.
        “Who’s there?” I thought to myself.
        “It’s me, I mean you. We’re one and the same.” I was confused. I didn’t hear this voice, it was more of a thought, but I didn’t know quite where it was coming from. I looked to both of my sides and then behind me. For some reason I was scared. Did I secretly want to be scared? Was there reason to be scared? Who was that guy I just passed?
        I glanced up at a house across the street to my right. The shades of one of the second story windows fluttered.
        “What was that?”
        “They’re after you.”
        “Shut up, I’m not listening to you.” Had someone been watching and waiting for me to pass? I tuned my ears to listen to the sound of a door opening. I continued walking down the sidewalk.
        “Come on. You’ve got to get them, before they get you.”
        “What the hell is that supposed to mean?” Again I was thinking to myself, yet I felt my lips mouth the words. I looked around to make sure no one was watching. I saw no one.
        “It’s so fun.”
        “What’s so fun?” I asked myself. I wish I hadn’t. All at once, I saw them all, all of my friends. I saw myself tearing them to pieces with my bare hands or with shiny weapons or different sorts of mechanical devices.
        “What the fuck?” I said out loud this time. My head hurt suddenly. I stumbled a bit. I heard a car coming from my right and I leaned up against a street sign to try to appear as normal as possible.
        As the car passed, I held my head in my hands. My head hurt, my knees were weak. And my heart was racing from one of the biggest adrenaline rushes I’ve ever had. My chest pounded. It ached. My heart went from zero to mach ten in just a few seconds.
        “See? Wasn’t that fun?” The voice was taunting me now.
        “I don’t know about you, but those were my friends. I don’t want to hurt them, why would you make me think those things?”
        “It’s fun.”
        “Fun to see me cringe? Is it fun to give me a heart attack and a headache? Do you find it fun to mutilate those I love most?”
        “What would you rather do? You’re a pansy. Gutless.”
        “I’m not gutless! Go AWAY!!” I screamed out loud in my head. I pictured myself yelling at my own face. I imagined yelling loud enough for the whole neighborhood to have been able to hear the inaudible thought.
        I crossed the street. There was nothing but silence in my mind. I walked further down the street.
        “You know, you’ll see your friends at school.”
        “Fuck off. I would NEVER do that to my friends.”
        “It’s convenient. It really is.”
        My mini-disc player started playing The Dropkick Murphys' version of “Amazing Grace.” I wasn’t a very religious person at the time, but somehow I managed to sing along silently with the song. It gave me something to focus on. I concentrated on the song. I didn’t want to talk to that person, whoever it was, anymore. I didn’t want to hear him or share his thoughts. I didn’t want to see the things he was so willing to do. Yet it was I. It was my brain that these thoughts and images were coming from. Did I somehow deep down inside really want to do the things that damned voice had shown me? I couldn’t accept that, I didn’t want to accept that.
        I pulled the metal handle on the red door of my school. I stepped inside, going blind for a split second. Almost immediately I heard the familiar voices of a few of my friends. Now was my test. I tried to act normal, despite the sort of episode that I had just gone through. I tried not to let the feelings that had overwhelmed me earlier haunt me. I tried not to let them see the anger and hatred and malice that I had felt.
        I thought throughout the rest of the day that it was as if I was in some sort of movie. Shouldn’t the voice be coming back and haunting me throughout the whole day? I thought so, but it never did. I never heard the voice again. Instead I simply saw its desires. The visions it had shown me of my friends that first day, got worse, more violent and more frequent. The adrenaline rushes, which I had learned to control, eventually grew too strong. When this happened, it was as if the Hoover Dam had broken open and a thousand knifes stabbed my through my heart. I told my parents it was because of being nervous about class. I even told my doctor that lie, but he gave me a 14-dose sample of what he called a “beta-blocker.” It was supposed to block my adrenaline rushes. It worked, now if only he had something to block certain thoughts I was having.
        It’s been almost three years since that first time. The visions haven’t gone. The pain has gone, or maybe I’ve just grown accustomed to it. My adrenaline rushes are under control, for now. I’d like to forget everything about the visions and the voice. I’d like to think that it never happened. But then I remember what someone once told me a few weeks ago.
        “Maybe, when you write about it, you can understand it more. Maybe, you can understand yourself some more.”
Maybe I can, maybe I can’t, but I think, for the sake of anyone I love and come to love, I should figure it out. I should be able to understand my own mind.