Here are the essay I've written thus far for my EN 211B class: Narrative
and Descriptive Writing. please select the essay you wich to read
from the drop down menu below. Below that, I will post the grades
to my essays when I recieve them.
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"..And Then I Ran Some More." |
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"The Water-Course Way" |
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"The Visions and the Voice" |
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“…And Then I Ran Some
More.”
Runners, to your marks!
Suddenly I forgot where I was, where I came from. I forgot who my
friends to either side of me were. I forgot that my feet were cold
and that I could hardly breathe. I forgot where I put my sweats or
who had my jogging shoes.
“Set!” I heard
an official yell into a microphone. The cracking noise was just barely
understandable over the roaring crowd and the thunder of four hundred
runners’ feet prancing as they lined up to my left and right.
“Yes, I remember
now. That’s the same pebble I saw here while warming up.”
I thought to myself in less than an instant. Like a light switch turning
on, I remembered what I was doing there. I remembered every day at
practice since I started running cross-country in seventh grade. I
remembered the people immediately to my right and left were my teammates.
I glanced at them and realized how focused they were, and for a split
second I wondered why.
“No time to think!”
I said to myself. I must have said that to myself before every race.
My mind always wandered. It kept me calm. Adrenaline was not a good
thing to waste. I tried to save my rushes until I needed them in a
few seconds.
BANG! That was the gun.
Move. Jeremy, you’ve got to go. This is it, your last race.
It’s now or never.
“Jeremy!” I
woke up to my friend Garrett hitting my knee. He seemed excited. I
was tired and therefore couldn’t possibly imagine why.
“We’re here!”
“What?” I asked,
groggily rubbing my eyes. I never did care for what my mom called
“eye boogers,” but it always felt good to rub it out of
my eyes after waking up. I sat up in my bus seat. I saw everyone in
front of me looking out of the bus windows on my side of the bus.
I turned to my right and saw the purpose of the four-hour bus trip,
Michigan International Speedway. Ah, the state meet. The end-all,
be-all of high school cross-country meets. Suddenly it clicked, a
feeling of anxious nervousness mixed with a double shot of awe and
adrenaline. The state meet! I was suddenly so excited to get inside
the stadium, to get warmed up, to race, and to be at the awards ceremony.
I could hardly wait for everything to happen, yet knowing full well,
it was the last time I would experience any of it, and that it was
all such a long time away.
The whole team walked around
the course, just as we did before any race. We had to be familiar
with the course so as to not take any wrong turns by mistake. I remember
walking along by myself, with my hands in my coat pockets straining
for every bit of heat. My head, shrouded by the hood on my sweatshirt
made me feel as though I were in a cave. I always walked by myself.
It was my way of focusing on the race to come. It was my time to devise
strategy and figure out whom I wanted to beat.
We eventually finished
walking the five-kilometer course and headed to our team tent to regroup
before our warm-up. Three hours had passed since we were on the bus,
but it seemed to pass like 3 minutes. However, the fifteen-minute
warm-up jog seemed, as it always did, like fifteen days. I could feel
the anxiety and excitement building up inside of me the whole way.
I tried to concentrate on my form to calm myself down. It worked,
but soon my mind began to wander back to the coming race.
Somehow through the crowd
and twists and turns that had me lost almost immediately after beginning
our warm-up, we arrived back at our tent. Stretch, change shoes, get
to the start line, strides, shed sweats; this was the routine we had
been doing every Saturday for the past 14 weeks. Except this time
it was different. Everyone paid deathly attention to getting their
shoes laced up just right and to getting the proper amount of strides.
Everyone was focused. Everyone had that look of disgusted anger, eyes
narrow and cold as the dry, crisp air surrounding us all. The only
reason we weren’t frowning in our annoyed sort of focus, was
that we were breathing heavily through our mouths in anticipation,
in preparation. Everyone knew what must be done. Everyone knew what
was at stake.
The next few minutes seemed
to pass as quick as our warm-up passed slowly. I eventually found
myself staring at the ground with my left foot on a painted white
line wearing little more than half a pound of polyester shorts and
jersey that offered me little more warmth and comfort than can of
pop would. I was, we all were listening for one thing, the ear piercing
sound of a gun that would stand out in life and memory as sharp in
contrast as the sun would stand out in the black emptiness of space.
BANG! That was the gun.
Move. Jeremy, you’ve got to go. This is it, your last race.
It’s now or never. My feet seemed to move forward on their own,
requiring little conscious thought from me. I began to tilt my head
back up to level so I could see in front of me. I felt a sharp pain
in my chest as I saw the sea of runners before me. Countless runners
all racing towards the first turn. I moved into position to avoid
getting caught up in the mass. All of a sudden I realized I was alone
in a huge crowd. I didn’t see any of my teammates; there were
no familiar jerseys in sight. I didn’t even recognize any members
from rival teams. Then I realized that they were ALL members of rival
teams. They were all gunning for us, gunning to replace the returning
state champions. It made the painful realization of my impending failure
that much more realistic.
I was no further than eight
hundred meters into the race and I was already out of breath. I was
gasping for air like a fish out of the water. I kept thinking how
cool, yet how cheesy it would be if I actually did do well in this
race. I was told by my parents and doctors not to run. Having pneumonia,
wearing almost nothing in twenty-degree weather while running was
not the sort of combination that could be called healthy. My lack
of breath wasn’t because I was out of shape. I was choking because
there was no room in my lungs for air. I had no choice really. I was
the fourth ranked man on my team. I had to give it my best shot or
our team was bound to lose the state championship.
I ran step after step,
mile after mile. I passed one man after the next. I ran to keep up
with every man who passed me, some successfully, others not. I ran,
until my mind blanked out. My mind had stopped, but my body refused
to quit. I don’t remember what happened after the halfway point
where my parents were standing yelling out how many more I needed
to pass to medal and what my time was. I never heard what they said
anyway, there were too many other people yelling and screaming for
their friends, brothers, and sons, and I was coughing too much to
pay attention to the crowd. We had somewhere along the course of the
race left the stadium to run in the vast fields behind it. I knew
that once I re-entered the stadium, I had three quarters of a mile
left, and here it came. I tried to pick up my pace a little bit. I
strained for every ounce of energy I could muster from my sore, energy
starved, oxygen deficient muscles. I continued to cough. Gasping for
air, I searched for a split second my body would let me take at least
one deep breath. I coughed again, and felt something in my mouth.
I spit it out as soon as I could, knowing that the more junk I had
in my mouth, the less room it made for air to get by. I remembered
seeing what I had spit as it flew to the ground. It was big; about
the size of a peanut, and it was red. I immediately noticed the taste
of blood in my mouth. The iron taste made me sick. Right then I wanted
nothing more than to stop running. But if I did, I would have let
everyone down, my coaches, my teammates, my family, my friends, and
myself.
Finally reentering the
stadium, I pushed myself as hard as I could. I pushed myself harder
and harder, searching for that little extra there always seems to
be. I pushed myself to keep up with other runners as they passed me
on their way to the finish.
“Finally! It’s
almost over!” I screamed in my head. I began to promise myself
the faster I ran, the sooner the pain could go away. I ran harder.
I ran as fast as I could. All the feeling in my legs went away as
fast as all my care for keeping my body unharmed left me. A feeling
of euphoria came over me. I felt nothing, yet I knew the pain was
still there somewhere. I watched the huge black and white checkered
sign marking the finish line pass high over my head as I ran beneath
it. I knew I could finally stop running. I collapsed. I felt someone
run into me. I felt someone else step on my foot. I couldn’t
get up. I crawled. Someone came to me and picked me up onto my feet.
I blacked out.
I woke up a while later,
the time since the race passing almost instantaneously, yet at the
same time I remembered everything that happened between then and now.
I had run. I had finished. I had given everything I had. My parents
were happy I had finished. The doctors were surprised I survived what
I had put myself through. Yet despite all of this, I hadn’t
given enough for myself. I will always look back on that race and
wonder what would have happened if I pushed myself harder, hard enough
to keep up with those who passed me at the end.
I’m a freshman in
college now. That race was a lifetime ago. I don’t run anymore,
I don’t compete anymore and that race has no significance in
my life. It’s a ghost that keeps haunting me. It was the big
game I was supposed to win, right? No, this isn’t Disney. This
is life.
“The Water-Course Way”
It was New Year’s Eve
and I was busy stacking my drums off to the side of the stage. I was
already tired from only playing a half hour set. The D.J. was blaring
some sort of hardcore punk or metal band; I wasn’t paying much
attention to it except for the fact that it was giving me a big headache.
I think it was sometime after I finished getting my drum set off of
the stage but before I started loading it in my car when I heard; “Hey,
can I get a picture?”
I was about 7 hours from
home, so I didn’t recognize the voice. I looked up to see a short
girl, probably about 17 years old. She had long dark hair and sort of
friendly aura about her. I agreed to have my picture taken with her.
The flash blinded me in the dark upstairs room of the local skate park.
Although it wasn’t exactly a fan, just a girl who collects pictures
of herself with “garage band” members, it still made me
feel like some huge rock star. She thanked me and started to walk away
as I began grabbing piles of drums to haul off to my car. I heard the
same girls voice talking somewhere seemingly distant. I was in my own
world when I played shows. When I drum, I’m in the zone. When
I set up my set, I’m completely oblivious to other people in the
room. I’m focused on the task at hand. I’m the same way,
usually, when I’m tearing down my set. Yet that night I was somewhere
in between. My mind was in the skate park, but my body was dead-set
on packing up my drum set.
“Hey, can my friend
get her picture taken too?” I looked up from my drums. I set them
down once more to allow for another picture. This time it was a girl
with short blonde hair and glasses with frames that looked like contemporary
versions of her mother’s high school pair. I found out her name
was Sarah.
Sarah had some sort of strange
energy with her that seemed to make her very easy to be around. I’ve
always been somewhat shy and somewhat introverted and meeting new people
is very hard for me to do. Sarah seemed to hover around me as I made
trip after trip from the stage across the darkened room, to the stairs,
and down two stories out to the freezing cold parking lot to my car.
I wasn’t complaining. I always like the chance to make a new friend.
I finished loading up my
drum set into my car, happy to be finally out of the cold. I walked
through the snowdrifts and empty parking spaces back to the door of
the skate park. I walked up the stairs, one last time and into the dark
room they called the “concert hall.” Sarah was there waiting
for me. She seemed to beam with energy from some unknown source. Sarah
had some sort of defiant courage. She wasn’t afraid to be herself
or act how she wants to. She was everything I was not. It scared me
a little to have someone who was so comfortable around me despite only
knowing me for less than half an hour. She kept telling me cheesy pickup
lines, then laughing at me when I looked at her confused. I wasn’t
used to girls hitting on me; I had no idea what to say. Every relationship
I had been in prior to this moment had been somewhat of a chance meeting,
if you will. I had never needed to flirt with girls I’d just met
and certainly no use for enigmatic pick-up lines.
I spent that evening with
Sarah and learned she had just broken up with her boyfriend. They had
shared a very good relationship and she was trying to find a way to
“be free” of him as he seemed to be free of her. It really
upset her that things, her situation had ended up like this. I tried
to help her as much as I could. I still didn’t know her too well;
I still didn’t know circumstances of her relationship with this
other guy. I tried to give her advice, council, and different perspectives
of her situation. We talked for hours. Somehow during that time my hand
found it’s way into hers. It made me feel entirely uncomfortable,
as if I was betraying her love for this other guy, and betraying my
own feelings I had for someone else. Yet, I didn’t remove my hand.
It comforted her. It made her see that there are other people out there;
there are better people out there. I’m not trying to sound narcissistic;
by no means do I mean myself as one of those better people. I just tried
to show her that people come and people go, but just because a very
good relationship ends, it doesn’t mean that’s it for love.
Love never ends.
Eventually 11:30 rolled around.
Sarah and I had been sitting by ourselves in a dark corner in the back
of the room for the past four hours. She got up and looked down at me
and looked a little regretful as she said she had to get going. I sort
of expected it coming. I got up to properly say goodbye. We walked over
to a nearby table where there were some bits of paper out and a pen.
We exchange email address before she finally went her way. I looked
down at the scribbling on the piece of paper in my hand. It seemed like
the phone numbers people get on their “one night stands”
in the movies, yet it felt more than that. It felt as though I had made
a very close friend, and indeed I had. I folded the piece of paper and
put it in my pocket. I sat through one more song by the last band that
played that night before deciding to leave. I walked down the steps
to the parking lot. I opened the door to my car, half hoping to hear
Sarah’s voice yell out to me to join her at another party. I never
heard her. I drove the short distance to my hotel.
I couldn’t stop thinking about Sarah the whole time I walked up
the four flights of stairs to the floor my room was on. Could I possibly
have fallen in love with her? I dismissed the idea. I hadn’t known
her long enough. It was just yet another sad example of the fact I grow
too attached to people. I began to think about the night and the events
that I had gone through. Reminiscing of the many different things I
talked to Sarah about, all the things I told her that I’ve kept
hidden from everyone else. There was some strange anonymity in speaking
to her I realized, as if I was talking to a random person in an Internet
chat room. However, Sarah was my friend now, I had her email address
and she had mine, somehow I knew we would stay in contact.
I began thinking about the
rest of my life. I thought about how every time I’ve seemed to
have found love it leaves me. Similar to the comfort I found in Sarah,
was now gone. Well, it wasn’t gone, per se, but Sarah was no longer
there with me. I felt alone again. Not so much alone in the respect
of being by myself, but alone with my thoughts and emotions. I had no
one to talk to, to tell my problems to, to ask advice of, or to share
feelings with. I let out a small laugh. It seemed to me that this night
perfectly reflected the events of my life. I mean, finding love, then
being alone. I was always alone. I didn’t mind it much, but whenever
someone like Sarah presents themselves, it reminds me how alone I am
at times. People remind me what exactly I seem to be missing most of
the time.
I turned on the television,
trying to forget things. This was my way of dealing with shit, to simply
forget it. But I couldn’t forget things, not tonight. I flipped
through channel after channel seeing movies of people falling in love,
seeing happy couples in the late night sitcoms. It irritated me. Why
couldn’t I have that? What was I doing wrong? The answer to that
question eluded me; even in my sleep, the question haunted me. I had
fallen asleep to the one show that didn’t have any sort of romantic
themes of love or happiness, Insomniac with Dave Attell.
I woke up a few hours later
to fuzz blaring on the television. I felt the remote beneath me. I had
been sleeping on it for a while. I guess that’s why it was snowing
on my television. I looked over to the other side of the bed, half expecting
to see someone else. Somehow I was relieved when I saw no one there,
yet the empty feeling of loneliness that had tormented me earlier was
back. It brought me back to a camping trip I had gone on with my girlfriend
at the time. I always had enjoyed the little things in life, and simply
being able to wake up in the morning with her in my arms made me feel
like the happiest man in the world. That moment was gone.
Everything eventually leaves
and fades away. I guess I should be used to it by now, seeing as I’ve
had to deal with the fact since before I was even cognitive of love.
However, for some reason, I still hope. I still hope and believe that
one day I will find my happiness and love. I believe that some bright
sunny morning, I’ll be able to wake up to the person I love more
than anything else, but until then I’ll float along the proverbial
stream, devoid of many things I won’t remember, until I find that
person.
The Visions and the Voice
Foreword:
I'd first like to say that when I was younger, I suffered
from epilepsy for about 4 years. I think that really screwed me up
in the head, opened some doors and closed others. However for the
most part, the closed doors, I'm glad are shut and the open doors
I'm glad were opened. middle school, well, 6th and 7th grade was a
rough time for me. I didn't do too well in my studies and things were
happening that I believe laid a foundation for the events that you
will read about. I grew distant with my parents, with most people
actually, but my relationship with my parents got to the point that
I didn't like them, they were always upset with me, and I didn't give
a shit. That's changed now, thankfully. I've learned a lot about myself
over the past year trying to stop the insanity that's been going on
in my mind. I've found four things that seemed to stop the visions,
Buddhism, martial arts, mountain biking, and my now ex-girlfriend,
Cayla. With Buddhism, I could calm my mind, "quiet" it down
through meditation and my religious beliefs. When I was doing martial
arts, I had something I could focus completely on. When I would mountain
bike, I was at ease, having fun. When I was with Cayla, she comforted
me, made me feel safe. The point is, it was a dark several years in
my life, but I've found a way to overcome it. In time, I will grow
out of it as I have grown out of my seizures.
The Visions and the Voice
Imagine for a second being
face to face with your best friend. Now picture the look in his or
her face when you, completely out of the blue, stab them in the stomach.
Their mouth drops open as they lean toward you. You stare at their
face while you grit your teeth. You feel their hands as they slowly
run over yours. They slowly turn their head to look up into your eyes
as if to say, “Why?” Things already seemed to be going
by slowly and this only makes it worse. The warmth of their blood
flows out over your hands as you pull the knife out. Your friend drops
to their feet, but before they have time to collapse completely to
the ground, you step back and then with all of your strength, you
kick your friend in the teeth. You have a somewhat satisfied feeling
and a rush when you feel them give and you see your friend’s
head snap back from the impact. There are no people around. Everything
is empty. Then it all fades.
This has happened to me. This has happened to me more times than I
can count. I have done this to nearly everyone I know. I tell myself
that it is all in my head, but it is so real. I can almost feel their
head as I kick it. I can feel the vibrations of the chainsaw as I
slowly start to dismember my friend.
I’ve never been able
to explain why I get these visions. They hit fast and hard, and at
any time of the day. I could be completely happy, and they come. I
could be pissed off and still they come and cripple my mind as well
as my body. I can’t tell what’s real anymore. Sometimes
I wonder why I’m still in college and why no one is mad at me,
and then I realize that it was all a dream.
It was a Monday. I was
listening to a mix recording of my favorite music. The Cranberries
came on. That song always seems to invoke some sort of emotion in
me, usually anger, spite, or hatred. It’s not directed towards
anyone. The song just makes my blood boil.
I was walking on my way
to class. The busyness of the streets seemed to have eluded my consciousness
until now.
“ Who’s that?”
“What?”
“Over there. Behind
the car.” He’s plotting something.” I look around.
I see the man behind the car. We make eye contact. The man was gruff
looking and it scared the shit out of me. I quickened my pace, keeping
my head down and avoiding eye contact with the man. I walked past
him as he loaded some big garbage bags into the back of his blue pickup
truck. I watch the pavement, straining my eyes for any shadows that
seem to be approaching me. I walked with the sun to my back as much
as I could, then I could see the shadows of anyone coming at me from
behind.
There was nothing. The
sun shined brightly that day.
“Who’s there?”
I thought to myself.
“It’s me, I
mean you. We’re one and the same.” I was confused. I didn’t
hear this voice, it was more of a thought, but I didn’t know
quite where it was coming from. I looked to both of my sides and then
behind me. For some reason I was scared. Did I secretly want to be
scared? Was there reason to be scared? Who was that guy I just passed?
I glanced up at a house
across the street to my right. The shades of one of the second story
windows fluttered.
“What was that?”
“They’re after
you.”
“Shut up, I’m
not listening to you.” Had someone been watching and waiting
for me to pass? I tuned my ears to listen to the sound of a door opening.
I continued walking down the sidewalk.
“Come on. You’ve
got to get them, before they get you.”
“What the hell is
that supposed to mean?” Again I was thinking to myself, yet
I felt my lips mouth the words. I looked around to make sure no one
was watching. I saw no one.
“It’s so fun.”
“What’s so
fun?” I asked myself. I wish I hadn’t. All at once, I
saw them all, all of my friends. I saw myself tearing them to pieces
with my bare hands or with shiny weapons or different sorts of mechanical
devices.
“What the fuck?”
I said out loud this time. My head hurt suddenly. I stumbled a bit.
I heard a car coming from my right and I leaned up against a street
sign to try to appear as normal as possible.
As the car passed, I held
my head in my hands. My head hurt, my knees were weak. And my heart
was racing from one of the biggest adrenaline rushes I’ve ever
had. My chest pounded. It ached. My heart went from zero to mach ten
in just a few seconds.
“See? Wasn’t
that fun?” The voice was taunting me now.
“I don’t know
about you, but those were my friends. I don’t want to hurt them,
why would you make me think those things?”
“It’s fun.”
“Fun to see me cringe?
Is it fun to give me a heart attack and a headache? Do you find it
fun to mutilate those I love most?”
“What would you rather
do? You’re a pansy. Gutless.”
“I’m not gutless!
Go AWAY!!” I screamed out loud in my head. I pictured myself
yelling at my own face. I imagined yelling loud enough for the whole
neighborhood to have been able to hear the inaudible thought.
I crossed the street. There
was nothing but silence in my mind. I walked further down the street.
“You know, you’ll
see your friends at school.”
“Fuck off. I would
NEVER do that to my friends.”
“It’s convenient.
It really is.”
My mini-disc player started
playing The Dropkick Murphys' version of “Amazing Grace.”
I wasn’t a very religious person at the time, but somehow I
managed to sing along silently with the song. It gave me something
to focus on. I concentrated on the song. I didn’t want to talk
to that person, whoever it was, anymore. I didn’t want to hear
him or share his thoughts. I didn’t want to see the things he
was so willing to do. Yet it was I. It was my brain that these thoughts
and images were coming from. Did I somehow deep down inside really
want to do the things that damned voice had shown me? I couldn’t
accept that, I didn’t want to accept that.
I pulled the metal handle
on the red door of my school. I stepped inside, going blind for a
split second. Almost immediately I heard the familiar voices of a
few of my friends. Now was my test. I tried to act normal, despite
the sort of episode that I had just gone through. I tried not to let
the feelings that had overwhelmed me earlier haunt me. I tried not
to let them see the anger and hatred and malice that I had felt.
I thought throughout the
rest of the day that it was as if I was in some sort of movie. Shouldn’t
the voice be coming back and haunting me throughout the whole day?
I thought so, but it never did. I never heard the voice again. Instead
I simply saw its desires. The visions it had shown me of my friends
that first day, got worse, more violent and more frequent. The adrenaline
rushes, which I had learned to control, eventually grew too strong.
When this happened, it was as if the Hoover Dam had broken open and
a thousand knifes stabbed my through my heart. I told my parents it
was because of being nervous about class. I even told my doctor that
lie, but he gave me a 14-dose sample of what he called a “beta-blocker.”
It was supposed to block my adrenaline rushes. It worked, now if only
he had something to block certain thoughts I was having.
It’s been almost
three years since that first time. The visions haven’t gone.
The pain has gone, or maybe I’ve just grown accustomed to it.
My adrenaline rushes are under control, for now. I’d like to
forget everything about the visions and the voice. I’d like
to think that it never happened. But then I remember what someone
once told me a few weeks ago.
“Maybe, when you
write about it, you can understand it more. Maybe, you can understand
yourself some more.”
Maybe I can, maybe I can’t, but I think, for the sake of anyone
I love and come to love, I should figure it out. I should be able
to understand my own mind.
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